“Just a few days out at sea...” was all Wilson imagined he’d have to endure. He really had no idea how many days had passed, just many, many more than a few. Maybe it was the kidney-stabbing dehydration, or the unforgiving sun, slowly ablating his skin like a dull knife. Unable to tally a simple count of day/night cycles didn’t even upset Wilson, it just added to the exhaustion. Maybe it was just delirium taking over.
“This whole being shipwrecked business sucks.” He thought to himself. Just one day out on the open sea was worse than his family road trips across the Midwest. At least there was some variety. The blank, blanket of blue offered no relief; the endlessly cloudless blue skies didn’t help much either. The occasional flying fish was Wilson’s only entertainment. At this point he almost hoped a shark would come along to take his mind off the emptiness.
Didn't set enough time aside to form a cohesive story. The idea was to create a bland, yet extremely brutal open ocean environment for the shipwrecked character. Then riding off humanity's combined accomplishment of landing the Mars Science Laboratory last night, I wanted to highlight the theme, that we're the sum of our parts and defenseless on our own, to the point we can plunge into insanity.
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Or maybe running out of the canned beets and creamed corn he managed to stow aboard his raft
Wilson’s journey had started off on the right foot. Just an easy-going cruise from Long Beach to Brisbane, carrying his favorite cargo: fine Detroit automobiles.
It had been five years since he began life anew as a merchant sailor and the relief of finding his life’s calling was comforting. And this cruise would only cement that sentiment. Long Beach to Brisbane
I really like Mr. Andy's idea of writing this piece as sort of a journal type entry...considering Wilson seems to be a pretty straightforward guy, I don't think you'll have too much trouble getting your point across. Sometimes journal entries end up going around and around in circles and it can be hard to follow. However, he is shipwrecked! His thoughts might be going around and around in circles anyway haha
ReplyDeleteIn any case, I do think that I would like to see more of a description of such a brutal ocean environment. I've never been shipwrecked, so I wanna FEEL it!!